After reading the articles the idea of writing deteriorating is not a true thing and technology and time might just be simplifying how we write in the future. My question: Should we completely place the blame for writing deteriorating on technology when it’s people that invent simplification of writing?
This week I spent approximately 1 hour going over the week number 2 assignment responses. From the documents, I chose two peers’ responses. I understood each one and was able to figure out how they used rhetorical analysis. I spent time making sure that I understood everything in the document. I went over their responses and how they used rhetorical analysis.
This week our only writing assignment was to respond to two peers’ week 2 responses. We were to take comments on them by asking, what did you learn from this post? what questions do you have for the post’s author? This took me about 20 to 30 minutes in total to do, as I was slowly figuring out what my peers had written about. After I was able to comment on their responses and complete the assignment. During this assignment, I worked at a normal speed trying to learn what the assignment was asking for. I do not believe that I struggled at this yet did my best.
Providing & Responding to Feedback
As this is the third week of assignments for this course, I have not really received any feedback yet but am hoping to get some feedback on how to better improve my digital receipts and how to further understand what I need to improve upon.
I learned how to give feedback on my peer’s work and better use the comments feature. I think I completed the assignment as best as I could, although I hope to learn with future assignments. I am slowly learning how to take what I learned from my peers and implement it into my future assignments. I have a basic understanding of the WLLN Assignment prompt and am looking forward to receiving feedback on my assignment on how to better improve.
Thus, because it is the third week of class, and I have only had such a few times with my classmates, but I have collaborated and given my feedback to my peers. I have introduced myself through the course site and through our week #1 and week #2 assignments. Other than that, I haven’t had much communication besides the comments I have given, I am looking forward to collaborating and working with my peers in the coming weeks.
Usually when anybody’s outside you see a lot of billboards advertisement commercials on LED screens and everywhere. The main thing you see in a lot of these things are companies trying to convince you to buy an item or donate money to a cause or visit a certain location. Now this is a tactic of persuasion which is seen in our daily life but a lot of us don’t really notice it but that’s what a lot of big companies do. Their job is to use rhetoric to try to convince an audience to get their product or spend money on them and that’s one thing we don’t notice but it’s using our daily life and I find that very important for English and writing in general. We have to do this so we can hook our readers on to whatever we are wring about or hook the audience on to what we are presenting.
Reflection – The audience I targeted was teenagers and adults under 22. I felt that sharing this story was very important to people because it shows a lot of character development not only for me but for others also. I chose to write about this it shows the significance of tv shows/movies for children. It can help them understand languages and the environment they are in faster than a lot of other ways of teaching language and it help them build a personality that they want. I mean we can all remember who we anted to be like growing up with tv’s and movies. A lot of the things we said came from these sources.
Language and literacy are used in everyone’s life, and it is around the globe. This allows us humans communicate with each other, learn more about ourselves and the world around us, and helps our character development.
Growing up PBS Kids and other kids’ channels such as Noggin/Nick Jr played a role in learning English. I was born in the US, but both my parents are from Haiti. At home they would barely speak English with us since that isn’t their primary language making Haitian Creole the first language I spoke. It wasn’t until I was around 4 years old when I started speaking clear English so that other people could understand me. These channels gave me the ability to communicate with people other than my family and start making friends as a child.
Some shows that helped me learn how to speak are nothing but classics everyone should know. Mickey Mouse, Electric Company, Cyberchase, etc. But I also watched a lot of movies with my dad such as Boyz in da hood, Coming to America and listened to music a lot. Focusing on a lot of words being used in entertainment industry allowed me to speak better and learn better. I believe that if English is not your first language, watching films, shows, and listening to music is an amazing way to learn a language and their culture. It played a key role in my development and communicating with others.
Technology cannot be blamed for how this generation is writing. It is clear that over time wiring changes and you can see that from every century. Humans are adapting to what they have and with adaptation always comes change. My question is that did humans in the 1700’s or 1800’s say writing isn’t as good as it used to be?
My audience is everyone and anyone that is interested in my story. Especially anyone with immigrant parents and first-gen students since they can relate to my writing. I tailored my language to make my words and experiences more relatable to the reader. I used comparison to show the contrast in my homelife and school life to paint a picture of how different the personalities were- one being joyous and the other being rude and cold. I also included a part where I confessed how much I regret my actions towards my mom. I used this vivid language to appeal to the readers’ pathos so they can see how much my ignorance has affected my life.
Language and literacy has always played a big part in my life and it is evident in my choice of topic for this essay. Through writing this assignment, it has only strengthened my admiration for others’ writing. Prior to this class, I have written essays for other subjects and other english classes however, this assignment/this class has allowed me to put my feelings into words. In other classes, I mostly write about other writers and their literary devices and languages, but writing about my own experience allowed me to see truly how much of my mental growth I achieved through Language and Literacy skills. I also have a newfound appreciation for writers because conveying your exact feelings into words and making sense of it is really hard. Even if I know exactly how I feel, it’s hard to write it out sometimes. This assignment has shown me that I need to work on my rhetoric.
Rhetoric has impacted my learning and writing practices the most out of these concepts/terms. Rhetoric makes our writing. Ethos, Logos, Pathos are all types of rhetoric that we can use in order to keep the audience engaged with our writing. Having clear and eloquent rhetoric in our writing allows us to communicate with our reader our points and persuade them into agreeing with what you are saying. I need to work on my rhetoric in my writing because I often struggle with over-explaining or I focus on background details rather than the main point. This leads both myself and my audience into confusion. Authors have a huge impact on my learning and writing practices. Authors are the ones writing the literature and if they are biased, then I will end up with a biased writing assignment. I admire how different authors have different stances on the same ideas, which allows me to gain more knowledge on the topic and create my own opinions.
Growing up in India and making a sudden life changing move to New York at the age of 4 was something I never truly grasped. I didn’t recognize the seriousness of this life-altering move. Some can argue that I was too little to understand, I think that I definitely could’ve shown more emotion- specifically sadness and maybe even anger, because I would be leaving my family and friends. I excitedly waved goodbye with a fat smile to my childhood best friends/neighbors and my grandparents, not knowing that it would be the last time that I would see the majority of them. My sister is 8 which is 4 years older than me and I saw her cry as we descended down to the LaGuardia airport, while I looked around in awe of the new world we’ve just entered. We moved around in New York 3 times and I went about it as if the course of my life wasn’t changing with each new “home”. Our first home was a tiny one bedroom, one bathroom apartment in sunnyside Queens that housed my sister, my dad, my mom and I.
In India, I was bilingual and spoke hindi and nepali. You would think it’s a good thing that a child as young as I was at the time, picked up not one but two languages (that were not primarily spoken in our house) and spoke it fluently. Instead I was made fun of by my peers and had snide comments thrown at me from other family members because I didn’t speak my own language, Tibetan. I’ve been a stubborn child since birth, so these insults didn’t have much effect on me. I would argue back when my friends commented about my lack of Tibetan culture and language. I never made the effort to change myself and learn because I took these comments as an insult instead of as constructed criticism. At times it felt almost as if I was ganged up on and bullied, which only strengthened my resistance to learning Tibetan because I didn’t want to give in and do what they wanted me to do. .
Fast forward to 5 year old Tenzin attending elementary school in NYC, I immediately adapted to American life and quickly forgot both of the languages I grew up speaking. I began learning and primarily speaking in English. Every morning, my mom would walk me to school for the next ⅚ years. My mom and I have always been closer than my dad and I. As those ⅚ years passed by, our conversation grew shorter and shorter due to our language barrier. Eventually it turned from conversation to a few sentences every now and then. When I started middle school, my mom’s English was getting better because she started to work as a housemaid in Manhattan to provide for our family.
In my teens, my ignorance only grew. At the ages of 10-15, I was very selfish. I was only concerned about normal pre-teen/teen girls things – boys and popularity. In school I was funny and loving to all of my many friends, and at home, I barely spoke to my family because I was constantly on my computer/phone. This emotional distance from my family can also be attributed to the language barrier that was previously instilled. During this time period, my family spoke only in Tibetan amongst each other, and when they would speak to me I would understand but only respond in English. I thought the only important language was English, and that I didn’t need to learn my native language.
During conversations with my mom on laundry day,or dinner at home, family outings etc. I would correct my mom and sometimes even laugh at her pronunciations of certain english words. I would speak over her when we’re in the grocery checkout line, or at restaurants because I was afraid of people not understanding her english. Looking back, I have not regretted anything more in life than the way I treated my mom during this time. I failed to understand that i learned English in school alongside kids my age and teachers. I was privileged in the aspect that I had so many resources and was taught at a young age so it’s even easier to learn. My mom on the other hand, had to learn English for her survival and for the betterment of our family.
Once I hit 16, I went to a Tibetan refugee camp in India where I met Tibetans that were born and raised in India. I realized how uncultured I was and I was ashamed to even call myself Tibetan, when I didn’t even know the first thing about my culture. There, I read multiple writings by the Dalai Lama and watched documentaries about Tibet and our painful fight for freedom. I attended conferences, and even met the Dalai Lama in person for a Q&A with my camp. After the month ended, I returned to New York as a new person with a new mindset. When my parents would talk to me, I would respond back in Tibetan and I never made a comment again about my mothers pronunciation. Reading has truly made such a huge impact on my life by giving me knowledge and evolving my mindset. These books on Tibet provided me with a sense of culture and comfort and eventually created my love for reading books on activism and religion. Not only do I feel more educated, but I have genuinely been happier since then. I am now 20 and for the past 4 years I have been educating others on Tibet whenever they ask me about my ethnicity and why I was born in India (and not Tibet). The more people I can educate, my country and our history/culture/language will stay alive.
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